Query Letter Critique Service

Are you an author looking for help with your query letter or submission materials? I’m a full-time developmental editor who assists writers in their pursuit of finding, querying, and signing with a literary agent.

Combining in-document edit suggestions with a written editorial assessment, I can help you refine your query, your synopsis, or the opening pages of your book to dramatically increase your odds of receiving full manuscript requests—and perhaps an offer of representation.

I strive to help authors maximize their chances of acquiring representation, and I’m proud to say that three of my clients have signed with a literary agent in 2022 alone. While there’s never a guarantee, I’ll do my best to help you make your query and opening pages maximally appealing, from emphasizing your hook to making sure your story hits the ground running.

A note about post-pandemic querying . . .

If you’re actively querying or have been recently, you know the process has slowed to a crawl. Agents are reporting that their inboxes are crammed, response times are extending, and agencies are increasingly adopting a “no response means no” policy.

What does that mean for the author? Should you query more agents at once? Still go out in small batches? Is there a chance for a “quiet” novel anymore, or does everything have to be high concept?

When you book a query critique or package with me, I’d like to know your querying history, your stats, your goals as an author, and any questions you have about how to strategize in the post-pandemic publishing world, so that I can offer advice and help you decide how to proceed. All my clients are welcome to send me updates, ask my opinion on an agency, and hopefully, one day soon, deliver news with lots of exclamation points—that’s my favorite part of the job.

If you’re interested in a full manuscript critique or developmental editing, go here. Otherwise, check out the Query Package options below. I’d love to have you on the schedule.

What my clients say about me . . .

“If not for Tory’s expertise in submission materials, I’d probably still be in the querying trenches. Her query package changes the game.”—Kyle Anthony, agented suspense/thriller author [Twitter]

“After eighteen months of fruitless querying, I enlisted the help of Tory Hunter to do a full manuscript critique, along with synopsis. As a result of her suggestions, I received a revise and resubmit request from an agent. Tory worked with me to address the agent’s concerns, and two weeks later I had an offer of representation on my cozy mystery series, which I happily accepted.” — Kate Jackson, agented mystery author [Twitter | Website]

“Tory’s insight and clear explanation really helped me when I was querying.”—Eilene Spear, agented contemporary romance author [Twitter]

More Client Testimonials

Query Letter Critique

$40

My query letter critique comes in the form of in-document edit suggestions and feedback inserted as comments using track changes, along with any additional feedback in the accompanying email, with the goal of refining your pitch for clarity, flow, and voice, along with ensuring that it properly introduces your protagonist, showcases your stakes, and offers a compelling hook while striking a balance between concrete and abstract language. You want to give enough details to give a strong sense of your story, but you also want to generate a sense of mystery.

The query critique also comes with a free second pass of your revised query letter.

Query Package

$40 + $6 per 1,000 words of manuscript (up to 10K words)

My Query Package includes a query letter critique along with an editorial assessment of your opening pages in the form of a written manuscript critique, with a focus on character development, plot, pacing, structure, voice, genre appropriateness, and what you can do to increase your chances of hooking an agent.

The Query Package also comes with a free second pass of your revised query letter and follow-up questions concerning the manuscript.

Query Package Plus

$40 + $10 per 1,000 words of manuscript (up to 10K words)

My Query Package Plus includes a query letter critique along with a developmental edit of your opening pages in the form of in-document edit suggestions and feedback inserted as comments using track changes. This is a more in-depth option that provides the same feedback as a Query Package but also offers detailed, line-by-line edits combined with written feedback to maximize the flow, readability, and intrigue of your story’s opening. This has proven to be the most effective option.

The Query Package Plus also comes with a free second pass of your revised query letter and follow-up questions concerning the manuscript.

Note: A synopsis edit can be added to any of these options for an additional $30.

Book a Query Critique or Query Package

If you’re interested in any of my query letter critique services, use the form below to get in touch, and let me know what I can do for you. If you’re not sure which option is best for you, I’m happy to answer your questions and make a recommendation. Happy querying!